How to Nudge An Agent Who Has Your Full MS

Right now I have 21 full manuscripts in my To Be Read pile. I have blown past my deadline on 14 of them. Some of the oldest manuscripts were requested in January, which means I've had them for four months (my quoted response time was two! I've had these twice as long as I said I would). 

I am not proud of this at all. In fact, it haunts me a little bit. I also now know that I've gotta quote longer lead times on requested manuscripts. Eight weeks isn't realistic for me and I need to be more accurate when I set expectations. 

Being late doesn't MEAN anything, other than I have a much heftier workload than I anticipated. That's it. I still want to read your manuscript. The fact that you didn't get an overnight read does not signal disinterest on my part. It just means that other parts of the job have demanded my focus (I'm about to go out on sub with a client's manuscript next week!) and I haven't been able to devote myself to reading the way I want to. This is just human failing, and the fault is mine. 

But that doesn't mean that you should sit waiting in perpetual agony. If I quoted you a response time when I requested your full and we've blown past that deadline, please do nudge me! I will not get annoyed. I want to be reminded that I'm slipping behind and I want you to feel comfortable coming to talk to me (because, after all, if I end up signing you as a client once I finally read your MS, you're going to need to be comfortable doing that!). 

Step One: When to Nudge
I do appreciate a bit of a grace period. If my quoted deadline falls midweek, maybe wait until the following Monday to give me a chance to wrap it up and get back to you. Usually I slate my reading days heading into the weekend, so I'm more likely to read material at the end of the week than at the beginning. But hey, if you want to nudge on a Wednesday, that's OK too!

Step Two: How to Nudge
It's always helpful for me if you reply to our existing email chain. I've got all my email flagged and sorted, so this way when I get your nudge it will already show up as a requested MS and I'm more likely to open the email right away, rather than risk letting the email languish amid other queries and wait to be opened in chronological order.

Step Three: What to Say
Short, simple, straight.

"Hi Kelly, I'm checking in on my manuscript TITLE, which you requested on DATE. Can you please confirm that you've received it and let me know when I should expect a response? Thanks!" 

If you have other pertinent information--like an offer of representation--definitely share that, too. 

Optional Step: Withdraw Your Ms
I really hope that you'll forgive me for delayed responses and allow me to finish your manuscript and give it my full consideration. But you don't have to. At any time and for any reason you can withdraw your manuscript from consideration if you no longer want to potentially work with me. Slow responses on requested material is an unfortunate reality in the publishing world. One I hope to mitigate by adjusting my quote times, and building dedicated reading time into my work weeks. You should never be met with silence; I aim to respond to all nudges within 24 hours whenever possible--if not with a response to the MS, then at the least with an apology and a request for more time. And please also remember that existing clients and their needs will always be a priority over potential clients. So I hope that a slow response alone isn't enough for you to determine that you need to move on. But if it is, or if there's any other reason why you'd like to close out your query, you may absolutely do so. Here's how:

"Kelly, with this email I am withdrawing my manuscript TITLE from your consideration. Thank you."

And that's that. 

SO. Please don't ever be afraid to reach out to check up on the status of your manuscript. And thank you again for allowing me to consider your work. Now, I've got quite a bit of reading to do, so I gotta go!

#QueryTip: A Query is Not a Book Report

I tend to carve large chunks of time out of my day to read and respond to queries. This works better for me than just reading a handful at a time. I get into the Query Mindset and dive in. When reading lots of queries in a row, things tend to jump out at me. For example, Willa/Willow and Evie/Evangeline are popular protagonist names right now. I see those over and over again lately. Also a lot of books set in the 70s. Groovy! But beyond creative similarities in queries, reading in batches also highlights common mistakes. And the biggest mistake trend I'm seeing in my inbox right now are queries that read like book reports.

What do I mean by queries that read like book reports? Well, something along these lines:

Dear Agent,

NEXT BIG THING is an 80,000 word YA fantasy novel that explores the ideas of grief and loss and familial dysfunction set against a unique fantasy back drop of a magical world full of ominous powers and evil adversaries. Readers will identify with the whimsical protagonist, Chosen One, as she grapples with a deadly secret and must find the strength to embrace her true identity or be forever banished.

This sweeping story, told in alternating points of view by unreliable narrators, features a non-linear sequence of events that will astonish readers, and a resolution that will resonate with anyone who has ever been desolate and alone, only to realize that their true home can be found in their own hearts, and the hearts of those who love them. Beyond just issues of grief and identity, NEXT BIG THING features a toxic relationship and examines the harrowing effects of eating too much pie while feeling especially sad.  These issues are more relevant than ever, given current world events, and that’s what really inspired me to write this story. 

I hope Chosen One and NEXT BIG THING captivate you as much as they have captivated me. After all, haven’t you ever wondered how you would begin to piece your life back together if you woke up one day with nothing left but a blackberry pie? This story is one way to find out.


In case it isn't obvious, I completely fabricated that query, top to bottom. But it follows a formula that I call "the book report." It gives me a lot of information about how the book is written and what it aims to accomplish and how people are going to feel about it. All of which is useless at the query stage. And it gives me nothing whatsoever about the story. Which is the only thing I care about at this point. 

I tweeted these #querytips recently, and received some email about them. What was wrong with including information about larger themes? Why limit a query to story-only when we all know that books can deliver so much more? Isn't that just short-changing your book? Don't agents want all pertinent information about a book, including thematic content, so that they can make an informed decision? 

These are all good questions, and I've been thinking about them for days. The truth is, my opinion hasn't changed. A query is not a book report, and shouldn't read like one. 

A query letter has precious little real estate. You've only got a few hundred words to get me interested enough to make a request, and the story is the most important thing. The rest comes later, when I read the full manuscript. If a manuscript has larger thematic resonance, I'll discern that when I read. But people always read fiction for the story. Even allegories, or satires, or social commentaries must exist within the basic framework of a story.

It's also quite difficult to tell a good story (and convey it succinctly in a query letter). If a writer chooses to focus on the effects of the story at the expense of the story itself, I become wary about the writer's ability to tell a story at all. I'm much more likely to request a query with a good story and hope it has larger thematic resonance than to request a manuscript about which I know nothing more than that it explores the concept of forgiveness. 

Tell me WHO is doing WHAT WHEN and WHY. Tell me WHO is trying to stop them and HOW. That's what you need to convey in your query letter. The protagonist, the antagonist, the goals, and the stakes. You've got a few hundred words to make me care, and I don't care about your personal take on universal themes. Not yet. The first thing I care about is whether or not you can whisk me away. Meaning and metaphor are always secondary. Story is king. I need to know you can deliver the goods, and the query letter is your one shot to prove yourself.